After completing my rough cut for my magazine, I received peer feedback as well as teacher feedback so I could examine where I went wrong.
On my front cover, there was numerous things I could improve on. One major aspect that was put across was the picture. It was too spaced out, which made it look too unnatural and gapped. Also, the angle and lighting that the picture was taken created no depth, making it look 2D and flat. To fix this, I will have to retake the pictures, ensuring that the lighting and mise en scene is to my desire. Another thing that was pointed out was that the bar-code was incomplete, it did not contain the codes and conventions that are found in this particular area. In order to complete this, I shall add to the bar-code, adding a price, issue number and the date of which the magazine was released. There was also too much text on the cover, making it look too cluttered and uneven, so I will take some of the text away to make it look neat and tidy. Also, people pointed out that the title of the main article was unclear and looked stuck on, so I will have to change the layout in which I have the text on the page.
The contents page had less to alter, however there was still some changes to be made. The text was too bottom heavy. Even though I followed my style model, the text was too big and there was too much in such a little space. To change this, I decided to move some of the next around and remove unnecessary data that clogged up the page. I also moved some of the text so it was on the top half of the page as well. There was a suggestion that I could add more colour, however, I am sticking to the rule of only using three consistent colours throughout the magazine. The pictures that are used on the page have little variety, so to change this, I shall take some more images in different angles including a close up to give the page more variety. The text was also too close to the edge of each column, so I either must make the text smaller or the columns bigger. Another thing was the fonts were all the same, making it look too boring, so I will need to experiment with different font styles and see which ones would compliment each other. Also, branding needs to be added.
The double page spread had a lot of issues that I needed to address. One part would be the gap between the first column and the double page spread centre line, it is huge and unnecessary. To fix this, I decided to take some images of the 'artists' in different surrounding and styles, then place them in the gap in a 'polaroid' style frame to make them look slightly scattered but natural. I may also add safety pins to keep the theme going. I also had to alter the colours used to show the difference between Corey and Gustav, because it made it look untidy and inconsistent, so I changed it to the same colour and put a sub-title to distinguish between the two different artists. I also forgot to include the codes on conventions that you find on a double page spread, which includes having the page number, issue number and logo on the top or bottom of the page. The columns were also uneven, so I went back and measured them all against each other. The columns that are moulded around the picture still look slightly uneven, however, that is how it is found on the style model I have followed in order to create this. Another thing that needed to be altered was to ensure the text is all the same size and to proof-read the article better because at some points, it did not make such sense.
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